Wednesday, November 14, 2012

Poem

I have a poem up in the new issue of The Collagist: "After the Piano." My friend Tina is in it, as well as Rilke. My favorite part is the slant rhyme between "struggle" and "subtle"; my least favorite part is the ending. What about you?

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  1. Not, I must admit, one of my favorite Gabbert poems, though I really like the bourbon-beauty-brother list. (I assume I should be gleaning something from the distinction between "you must change your life" and "you should change your life," but I can't, really.)

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    1. There's a huge difference! And/or the difference is subtle.

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  2. The ending is my favorite part, though I do like the entire poem. The Kiss by Klimt popped in my mind, its history, etc.

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    1. Thank you. I'm always paranoid about things being overly sentimental.

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  3. This kills me.

    "my brother loves me/ but he doesn't miss me."

    !

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    1. Thanks for reading Jeff! I spent some time with your manuscript yesterday, by the way -- love it!!

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  4. Favorite parts are the rhythm of the line breaks, and the line quoted by Jeff. I have no less-favorite parts.

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  5. The brother line got me in a soft spot, too. And this *is* one of my favorite Gabbert poems. (John shared it on Facebook and I kept the tab open all week. I feel like that doesn't sound like as high a praise as it did in my tab-addled mind). Be less fearful of sentimentality! You won't lose your edge.

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    1. Thank you sweet! I find that high praise indeed.

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  6. The link doesn't work anymore but this one does:

    http://thecollagist.com/the-collagist/2012/11/11/after-the-piano.html

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